AP Seminar
Performance Task 2
Individual Written Argument (IWA)
2020 Scoring Commentaries
© 2020 College Board
agreement that poverty is detrimental to children. One dissenting voice, Susan Scutti, contributes that
children in poverty have closer families, which can only be described as revealing basic disagreement.
Row 4: Establish Argument
The response earned 8 points in Row 4. The response demonstrates an attempt to provide a logical
organizational structure, but that structure suffers from the unmanageable breadth and depth of the
topic. Since the response tries to encapsulate so many topics (bullying, social exclusion, academic
failure, and physical abuse), the argument devolves into a list of ways in which being poor hurts
children, with disparate pieces of evidence used to imply the response’s argument that poverty hurts
children. As such, the response demonstrates an understanding of how evidence should support claims,
but the overly broad nature of the paper’s topic prevents the argument from coming together to
support any feasible conclusion.
The response arrives at the conclusion that low-income households “influence children in various
detrimental ways” in the last paragraph and offers humanitarian aid and tutoring as possible solutions,
without sufficient detail for a reader to assess its plausibility.
Row 5: Select and Use Evidence
The response earned 6 points in Row 5. The response includes evidence from multiple scholarly and
journalistic sources, though relevance and credibility are rarely explained and so must be surmised
through the References page. Additionally, the use of those sources is often misaligned with the
evidence provided. For example, on page 4, Operation Warm, described as “providing winter coats to
needy children,” provides evidence of the percentage of poor children who do not complete high school
with no explanation for why Operation Warm is a relevant or credible source for that information.
Finally, on page 5, Elizabeth Bruenig, an opinion journalist, is employed to discuss an otherwise
unreferenced study.
Row 6: Apply Conventions (Citation and Attribution)
The response earned 3 points in Row 6. The response is mostly uniform in citation style. The Reference
page is, for the most part, formatted correctly. The in-text citation UCDAVIS, unsuccessfully linked to a
citation in the References section, could be either Maurer or “What is ‘Deep Poverty’?” Also, the in-text
citation UNICEF is unclearly linked to the References citation “Ending Child Poverty.” Finally, Dryden is
referenced in the paper but does not appear in the list of references. While there is uniformity with
citation style and overall successful linking in citations, the errors in citation demonstrate a mid-level
mastery.
Row 7: Apply Conventions (Grammar and Style)
The response earned 2 points in Row 7. While the response is mostly clear, there are lapses into
colloquial language. For example, the response states that “parents are so stressed out.” The response
also displays moments of syntactical awkwardness. For example, on page 2, the awkward transition
from the Bulman source into the Pells source says, “Adding on to Bulman.” Additionally, the response
attempts to address too many disparate ideas in the space of a sentence. For example, on page 4, the
response discusses shame and abuse together in one sentence without using punctuation appropriately
to clarify and separate ideas.